Jei & Bill Assignment 3

Dear Mr. Sprite,

I am executive assistant to Paul Revere, who is the President of Freedom Holdings.
Unfortunately, he doesn't have enough time to send his itinerary for you, so I am writing to let you check his itinerary.
Mr. Revere look forward to meeting you with Terriaki Incorporated in Tokyo on Monday.
However, Mr. Revere doesn't have any time on Monday, but please do not worry about that. He is going to stay for 3 days from Monday to Wednesday, so you can choose on Tuesday or Wdnesday, when you available.
Futher to our letter, please check the following attachment.
Attachment has specific details of the his itinerary.

Best regards.

Jei & Bill
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Dear Mr. Sprite,

I am executive assistant to Paul Revere, who is the President of Freedom Holdings (WE CAN ASSUME MR. SPRITE KNOWS THIS). Unfortunately, he doesn't have enough time to send his itinerary for you, so I am writing to let you check his itinerary. COMPREHENSION INCORRECT (BETTER: I've been instructed to send you your itinerary)

Mr. Revere look (is looking) forward to meeting you with Terriaki Incorporated in Tokyo on Monday. However, Mr. Revere doesn't have any time on Monday, but please (. Please do not worry about that. He is going to stay for 3 days from Monday to Wednesday, so you can choose on Tuesday or Wdnesday, when you available.

Futher to our letter, please check the following attachment. (The) Attachment has (the) specific details of the his itinerary.

Best regards.

Jei & Bill

Jonathon's Notes: While your writing is fairly clear, it suffers because you did not understand the assignment. Mr. Revere is not going to Tokyo. You are not supposed to be sending his itinerary. Mr. Revere asked you to send Mr. Sprite the itinerary for Mr. Sprite's Tokyo trip. Good use of the target language, though - it works well in your new context.